Media film script

There will not be any dialect heard within my film trailer as i want to give the impression of the characters being out control and disconnected from the audience. Only the muisc and a short voiceover spoken by a female will be heard.

Voice over:Have you ever felt alone? Completely ? Really? Out of control? (scene cuts to girl wiping away tears)
Voice over: She has. But she knows ho to make it better. (scene cuts to girl and boy fighting)
Voice over: One pill. (scene cuts)
Voice over: Two pill.(scene cuts)
Voice over: Three pill.(scene cuts)
Voice over: All done.(scene cuts)
Voice over: (blank screen shown when line is said) She knows how to make it better. (fast cut to girl screaming in mirror)
Voice over: Doesnt she?